This is this week’s submission for One Single Impression (prompt # 31): Fleeting
One Single Impression is a community of poets writing and sharing haiku and other poetic forms. Each week a new prompt is offered for inspiration.
So much of the poetry on One Single Impression is beautiful and/or elegant. This submission is not that or that…
slug-like
contracted
bound up
too much
what kind of marketing mischief
calls relief from a century of gobbling consumption
fleet?
shouldn’t real relief be called:
‘have you considered eating more locavore cruciferous vegetables’?
or
‘if you’d exercise a tad more regularly, you’d feel a lot better?’
or, at least:
‘one good fight with your significant other would clear this problem right up’?
Or, finally, how about:
‘Just stop’
Too much stuff
made consumed discarded
everything is breaking down,
thank all the gods and goddesses and all the tea in china.
Oh, that this were a fleeting problem.
Or confined to only my gut.
The Story of Stuff with Annie Leonard (full version–worth your time!)
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That is a strange one, Beth. But I do like how you tie the concept of what’s happening to your body to the earth’s body.
So the earth needs an enema? I’m afraid humanity would be (will be)part of the detritus…
This is a very clever piece! For me, you have offered a very serious idea in a hilarious, playful way! To achieve both at once is quite a feat!
Dear Gemma–
Thank you for your kind words–I’m sitting here wondering if I should have posted this–so many thanks!!
And JB–yes, the ties between my (any of our) bodies and the earth’s body is the central theme–and I’m afraid of the same thing!
Yes, this is very clever, layers of meaning, and the humor delivers a nice kick, too!
Very cleverly done. You make our eco-vandalism more personal here, allying it with the body. And let’s face it, the rubbish we put out there enters the food chain and ends up in us.
Great take on the prompt!
I wish this were a fleeting problem, too. You give me pause and make me think. Thanks, Beth.
dear beth,
-"you have offered a very serious idea in a hilarious, playful way!"_
"eco-vandalism "-just wonderful..many thanks..
I love it!
I think it is not only hilarious but very appropo!
Phew–
Glad you all are finding it humorous–it was funny when I started writing it, got sort of serious as I worked with it, and then I feared that it might be too weird, twisted and not-eloquent…
You all are great–thanks for the encouragement!
Beth, I love your lecture ‘fleeting moments’ with "Fleet." You are right, it isn’t a ‘fleeting problem.’ :-)
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Wow, what a cool riff! Great work.
This is strangely beautiful if one looks closely.
I like it very much. I am somewhat new to your poetry. I’m glad I stopped by.
love-bd
amen to that!!!! (too much stuff says it all)
Nifty take on the woes that ail!
Here’s a great post on one of my favorite blogs: Soul Shelter. The title is: 5 ways to have less and enjoy it more Definitely ‘cathartic’!
http://www.soulshelter.com/2008/09/28/five-ways-to-have-less-and-enjoy-more/
Love the take on the prompt. Sometimes fleeting is like a purge.
That’s a brilliant analogy, Beth. Very enjoyable read, and equally compelling.